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The End and The Beginning

by ~BookWormMK

Now is now.
Kaylin is stepping off the Light Train. Its dark and the dry wind scratches at her face. It's the one place that doesn't come to mind when you think of New Year's Eve.
In front of her blooms a different kind of darkness. It's wet and humid. She turns around and Darus is there.
"This is it," he says. "The final gate. The last trial." He spreads his arms, and the wet warm dark spreads out and presses against her dark. He pulls his sword out of the scabbard. Kaylin stands in front of him, tensed to run.
"Running again?" He flourishes his sword. It's giving him an unfair advantage. The sword disappears.
"You should sacrifice yourself now, if you want to win," he says. The fear in his voice is unmistakable. "A fair trade, one life for all, don't you think?"
"I don't want to die," Kaylin says. Her voice is strong and afraid. She closes her eyes, and opens them. A portal of light appears between them. They both blink.
"I didn't do that. You can't do that." Darus says.
"I did." She steps forward, and they're almost nose to nose, almost in the portal. "I didn't make it. I destroyed the dark."
"Sure you did," he scoffs. She steps forward, eyes wide open. He steps forward, and they're inside the portal, and she laughs, because it's all so clear. She reaches out and touches the dark, and it's gone. They're all part of the cycle, and she reaches out and Darus disappears, is inside her.  She looks down and sees light, and she touches herself and is gone.
It's midnight. People shout "Happy New Year!" and kiss. A trail of light blows across the sky. Everything is different but no one feels it, except for one girl, sleeping, dreaming of a light that is excited and warm and asks her something.
"Kaylin," she replies.
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I wrote this for Odyssey Into 2012. I never realised it is so hard to write in 300 words! It's 320 instead. Hope it's good.
Edit: I can't believe this was chosen! Thank you!
Second Edit: I'm not used to so many comments to my work. So a general thank you to all.
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*xlntwtch Jan 16, 2012   Writer
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A really fine end to the Odyssey. The last two sentences really made this work for me, and for many others, I'm sure. Thank you.

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really nice :) You deserved that final chapter :)

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Mood: Joy ~JustinB4Eva Jan 15, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
nice

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Mood: Joy *LAvenus79 Jan 15, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
$techgnotic was right! This piece is mesmerizing to the end! It's beautiful. Congrats!

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Wow. Just wow.

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~BillBlogins Jan 2, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Great Job! Nice and tight. Kudos!
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Mood: Joy ~KaiDarknight Jan 1, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
oohhh so she won in the end and in exchange she's reborn...

congrats being chosen :D

awesome job on there :)

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:iconglared:
congratulations! even though your ending is short, it has a lot packed in it and i really like it.

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~Sayuri14 Jan 1, 2012  Student Writer
congrats on being selected :) the ending...is kaylin reborn in that girl? :P

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~BookWormMK Jan 4, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
No, the thing is: she realizes everything is a cycle, and when she erases the dark she is outside the cycle, the light train not being a real thing, so she uses Zephyr to take everything in, as noone can live like that she becomes the light and the cycle repeats- but this time, Kaylin will not have to kill Darus again. She won't know about the light train or Zephyr, she is saved.

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